by tomlitilia
While you were relating what was happening between her legs, you also were careful to convey what was going on between her ears. And that is what makes a good story great! ****
This story built up gradually, with a lot of teasing. Just right for erotic arousal. So many make the mistake of ignoring the emotions and going straight for improbably abrupt physical action. Sex is about so much more! And you checked it out with a woman before posting (very good idea - I think good erotica should appeal to both sexes). Great stuff.
I chose this story at random from the list of group sexual stories and was glad I did. A tight, well written tale that slowly built to a satisfying conclusion. Lots of sizzle!
This story ws awsum..
I m so wet..
My boyfrnd gonna hv hard tym satisfying me..
You took the time to develop a good story with a character build up. You show respect for yourself as a writer and respect for the readers by developing a plot in a short story and adhering to the rules of grammar.
Plus it was a turn-on to read your story.
Thanks pbon.
No plans for a sequel in the foreseeable future – I have too many other stories I'd like to finish. But you never know.
This is a very good story not only the sexual aspects bout the points leading into it had me hooked from the start of it all
A very pleasant read. And I was hard from the start, all the way to the end.
Romantic gangbang stories... Finally I have a name for my genre!
I am in total shock, not one cocksucker Anonymous complaining wrong category or Julia was a slut. All girls should have a friend like Anna, that bring out the slutty side, absolutely loved it. I would marry a girl just like Julia.
You Tomlitilia have a great style of writing. Now hurry up and please write a sequel. maybe Anna and Julia doing a team of guys. I will let your imagination go crazy.
My girl Shazz69 read this story on the weekend, She would love to be in a situation just like that especially if I was one of the guys spraying her with cum. My girl and I love storys with lots of hard cock and cum. Wife sharing is the best. Great work Tomlitilia.
... Plainly, just downright foolish!
And infantile; and simplistic, and unbelievable, and nonsense, and absolute crap!
If you're proud enough of this narrative to publicly publish it, that is sufficient to warrant your psychiatric intervention. Seek help - or a better education.
"beauready" is a jealous fool who hasn't posted any stories and clearly needs mental help if this story caused that type of reaction. I think it's nicely written and very erotic! Thanks
After reading this I turned to my husband with a smile and said: “I just read a cute gangbang story.” I loved it and would happily trade places with Julia! I might have hoped it would have lasted longer so I totally agree they should all go home for more. Thanks for writing it. Jx