by stlgoddessfreya
to be a huge chunk missing between being introduced and his cock disappearing down her throat. That's not erotic!
The build up transmits tension. But it does appear to be interesting fragment.
What a tight, well-written scene. The fact that it leaves one wanting more is a testament to how well it is written. A sweet taste, sexy, what else does one need? Loved it. Such a talent.
But not a story - really. Maybe an opening paragraph. Maybe a vignette. But with so many, many issues and questions unresolved I find myself being upset that there wasn't more of it. And wishing I hadn't read it. I don't like unresolved. Sorry. Maybe next time.
Seems there could have been a story. A little left to the imagination of the reader is good, but leaving 90% to the reader is not.
...as a bonus, your English doesn't suffer from the usual Lit problems. Thank you.