All Comments on 'My Mother'

Yes yes. Very exciting. Great read 💕

Writing needs work. 3 stars.

Is father Donald or Donna?

No interaction between mom, aunt and girlfriend?

Very nice storyline. But to be honest, all the spelling and grammatical errors, besides misnamed characters in the middle of the story, ruin it. Suggest you either find someone to edit it, or at the very least, make sure your spell check and grammar check are on to do it for you.

Again, very good story line. Leaves room to develop characters for future stories!

Good story, but too many characters for a single page.

English is aweful.

You need an editor. Story is good though.

Verb tense needs attention.

Proof trading is required.

LAID , as in laid on a bed, is a verb and, once on the bed, is complete. Lay, on the other hand, is what you answer your partner have done AND are doing. You are not the first writer I have mentioned this to.

Good story..I always find it hotter somehow when a wife or girlfriend is included, especially if the author acknowledges that he could never stop enjoying his family lovers..I used to love it when my mother would flirt with me in the presence of my wife. I would get so turned on that it was my mother who was making my cock hard. She loved it too..she’d quickly squeeze the shaft, then stare at me and innocently play with the buttons on her blouse. Not smiling, she would just stare some more..Mommy wins again..Making her son so hard. He’s helpless and can’t stop getting harder.

JT