All Comments on 'Family Obligations'

Very very nice

One of the better stories...

Hngggg ;]

Aside from a few errors like "The two men together worked together to..." my only bit of criticism is really just my own pet peeve. I feel the "disclaimer" at the beginning of any story, from any author, is distracting and takes away from the submission as a whole. It seems more "amateur-ish" than Lit should be.

Wildly sexy with all of the outrageous sex, but yet sweet and loving.

Nicely done and a very enjoyable read. Thanks

MMMMMMMM!!! Lolita would love to be a part of this family....so very hot!

I enjoyed the story even though it was marred by many writing problems such as run-on sentences and missing commas. I realize that most people don't care whether the story is well-writen, but maybe you could find someone to proof read your work before submitting it even if it's only to to humor people who do know the difference.

Just loved your story. Thanks, looking for more of them.

Fuck the (few and minor) grammatical errors, this is one of the very best stories I've read. The initial mother/son fuck as witnessed by Alesha was fantastically descriptive and hot. How could any red blooded male not want to fuck his mother when she's like Nikki? One of your very best efforts AS. Thanks.

Pleeeeeeease carry this story on, absolutely loved it! :D

I lost interest after girlfriend was found out then after talk boyfriend said mother was best . Girlfriend must be stupid . Quit reading after that .

I am not all that interested in dad being part of the action. But a guy fucking his mom, his sis and his girlfriend? Now that is close to the land of endless orgasms! I just love stories in which a girlfriend or wife discovers that her guy is having sex with his mom. More stories with that angle, please!

One of the best stories I have read on here for some time...well done would love to see more!

This is disgusting. Family is not meant to have sex. How can you even describe it in public? They should be ashamed. INCEST IS ILLEGAL AND MORALLY WRONG!

A little different indeed, but very good and hot. Nice work! ^__^

A terrific concept and extremely hot up through Alesha's discovery and her reaction to it. The initial threesome with Nikki and her son was also very erotically effective, but thereafter it seemed bit rote, like each permutation and combination was being portrayed but without much "drama", by which I mean conflict or tension within or between the characters. In my experience the best stories not only have vivid and arousing sex scenes, but they allow the characters to develop by learning new things (often about themselves-- as Alesha did early on) or by resolving conflicts either interpersonally or intrapersonally.

Take no damn notice of the haters...if they think incest is so bad they shouldn't be here.

Story line is a little weak but the sex was SMOKEN HOT!!!!!!!!!!!

Someone else has said how it all becomes rote once you strayed into a group story with too many ho-hum permutations. Everyone has to do everyone else. Even the lads have to consider the possibility of doing one another on command.

Exit real thrilling excitement and forbidden passion - enter routine stroke porn. These could have been any five people by the end. Waste of a good concept at the start with his GFs outside the M/S POV.

I've liked your other stuff much better.

I like it when everybody wins, even the father is not left out in this one. No cheating here, just good, clean fun. Your descriptions of the action are top notch as usual, however you could use a bit of editing for grammatical errors.

Some did not like the father being included. There must be some folks out there that really have problems with their own fathers.

Ha, I was left with one question though. How is this child of religious parents going to get away the next time she has to fulfill her family obligations?

Keep writing more where nobody is cuckolded, left out, etc. Thanks!

I like the story specially at the very end. The way Alesha holds hands with her boyfriend' mom as the mother and son doing a very loving sexual intercourse. And then the idea that someday she will have to experience it with her own son. It is very erotic.

You should make a part two to this story.... I am curious to know what that will be like.....

I agree the story line is excellent. Sex is hot. Build up was great at first as many say. I didn't like Johny telling his mom was more or less his favorite fuck, but then she was to be submissive in this chapter but still it added an uneasy twist.

I think it would have been good if Alesha's question if the men did anything should not have just died out with all the women sharing knowing looks. Alesha in the next chapter need to ask again, but add more about what the men are thinking which is hesitation followed by lust. It might even happen when they are alone talking about how they owe the women in the family to get comfortable having sex together. I mean when going totally fantasy like these stories, let it all happen. Maybe the men are introduced into anal sex with the group, with the women opening their asses first with strapons.

Lots of possibilities. I hope my comments are constructive as I mean them to be. I loved the story overall and as the purpose of these stories my own orgasms were great.

Some of us like stories where all the women don't have insanely huge breasts. You know a B cup with erotic long rubber hard nipples that show even through her bra is pretty erotica maybe more so.

The story is excellent, wondurfully crafted with presicion and the incestous sex is extremely arousing. Great work !

have read this a number of times and thoroughly enjoy it for its total devotion to incestual love! however, i find it sad for alesha that, as written, she will never know a total love with her boyfriend or any other man except a son which she has not born yet,,,,, i understand why ahabscribe did it,,, i'm just sayin',,,,

just wish i had a family like that when i was growing up,,,feel like i have missed a lot!

I still think he could have been just a touch more sympathetic to his girlfriend and fucked her at least once before they put the collar on her. 3 stars.

I'm not sure why, but several authors here seem hell-bent on invoking as many religious references as they can -- as if to thumb their noses at religions. Why??? It's a detraction. You might as well introduce someone as Asian and call them a traditional racist term. Why not just say "modest" or "prudish" if you must. But why invoke religious. I like these stories, but these references are offensive.

Really you are a greate writer, with scence of handling imotions and dailogue, I liked your all stories, this story is awesome, but my imagination is different, if Alesha being the wife of joney, and Alesha is the niece of Jenny, and her parents are grandparents of Alesha, or something like,

thanks...siba.s.tripathy@gmail.com

I had a problem when the father would not let her catch her breath and get ready for the next act and he virtually raped her and had little or no concern for her pain. I understand the slave concept but find that kind of abusive behavior is not what a person will inflict on someone you love.

totally sick.

I alwatys look for a sense of believability; there's no way this'd happen, even in the surreal world.

Marvin

I'm all for expressing family love and at first I thought this would keep love as the important element. Unfortunately the father forcing anal sex on the girlfriend was the exact opposite of love. I'm usually a big fan of your writing. I hope you'll continue writing more with love and not forcing something on a partner.

I really enjoyed your writing. I especially loved all the suggestions of Alesha partaking in incest later in life.I will say that I agreed with the number of posters that took issue with the forced anal sex. I understand the slave concept but where is the compassion that should come with the love being expressed abundantly in this story. However that is personal preference so pay no mind to my preferences. A very good read! Thank you!

and that is what the father did...a total bastard....totally spoilt what was otherwise a good story...there was no need to go down this road......you ruined what was a fun story...WHY????? Perhaps you believe in rape......sick and perverted....

two points which were scratches in the paint job so to speak were the fathers unconcern for her being overwhelmed and their quick and sudden forcing of the anal

aside from those two points a very lovely story

I'll have to agree with some of the other commentators. The story was great until you opened up the character of the father. She knew she wore the collar, but she'd only worn it a little time. He did pretty much rape her. Told her to simply get used to it. And then the son butt fucks her without any real lube for her first time. The father should have offered lube too, when she said she was so sore. They fucked her unconscious the first weekend she was with them. Yeah, after she agreed and put on the coller the weekend turned nasty. Johnny got a double blowjob while Aleisha got raped. You are better than this. I've read too much of your work. Go do it.

I rather liked this one, I even imagined myself as the daughters future Bi-Gendered Bi-Sexual lover joining the Family at a later date.

Right off the bat, Literotica should have the categories of "RAPE" and "Group Sex" (more than two) as story tags!! My position on RAPE, even coercion and/or forceable reluctance is beyond apprehension; my brain does not compute the why's of such brutality!!

The story is unusual in that the girlfriend is the narrator and not at all part of the incest for the normal blood-kin incestual relationship! She, Alesha, is the outsider, the third--in this story the fifth--wheel of the incestuous affair! Except for the anal and pussy RAPE issues with David Hollister, the family patriarch, on Alesha as her indoctrinationinto the Hollister family excapades, I very much enjoyed all the sexual activities of the Hollister Family-four. The addition, or better yet, the inclusion of Alesha into the family circle was a detraction for me.

For me I will read all of 'Ahabscribe's stories of Incest/Taboo! My favorite eroticism story is realistic and pure incest, especially with pregnancies of the blood-kin female lover, life-partner and confident!! He does write great stories and genre's of erotic pleasurable fantasies and (for the most part, depending on the content) his selection of context and themes is excellent!

This story made me slightly uncomfortable. The mother figure is a sex crazed creature who only seems to care about satisfying her own urges and the father struck me as creepy. The Dp scene was basically rape and I disliked the characters strongly. I have enjoyed the other stories you have written but not this

I always give 5 stars, and yours is no exception. I do however normally stay away from rape or non-consensual stories owing to the negative feelings associated with the material afterwards. This story has so many issues for the main character that it is hard to imagine her staying with this family. The "father" doesn't care about her, she's just an addition to the harem. Her boyfriend doesn't and will never love her more than he loves his mom. Her best and, frankly, only option is to hope she gets pregnant with a son, dumps the boyfriend, and waits for 18yrs until she can find her own happiness. Sorry, I just can't buy it.

Is right on the money. My only difference is that I don't feel an obligation to give five stars for story fathers like this one. I, too, can't understand why Alesha would ever get married and still take second place to her Mother-in-law. Sigh

Afraid I can't give you the rating that you want. She loves him and retains his love by having sex with the whole family. She's sad that she'll never know her future husband the way his mother does. She feels small twinges of jealousy already. What about when she wants a baby? Will the family put her and Jonny's 'obligations' on hold while they try to concieve? What kind of jealousy will she feel for Nikki if she has trouble becoming pregnant? Does the father even like her or, as one reader said, does he just regard her as an addition to his harem? Jonny's not giving up his family obligations or priviledges no matter what Alesha decides, so what does that say about his love for her? The father/Son DP is basically rape. She told David that she wasn't up for another bout just yet and then Jonny snuck up behind her and put himself in her when she'd already said,'No'. And she was in pain. All women should have free choice at all stages of sexual activity and be able to say 'No' at any time some activity makes her uncomfortable. After all, women risk much more than men when they offer their bodies. They are usually offering their hearts also. Though it is hidden pretty well, she is coerced into sex with the whole family to hold onto Jonny's love. I can't condone even the fantasy of this, Ahabscribe, you can do so much better than this. You've wasted your time and talent writing this and you've wasted my time reading this while hopeing to find something to redeem it. But failing. I read this through because I don't comment on stories I haven't read, but this gets an "I hated it".

Sorry, this rates a 2 and only because I've sadly read even worse treatments so I hold back the 1-bomb for the really really awful stuff. This kind of family romp rarely gets handled with the delicate easy-going touch it requires. Even if group/orgy action is your thing, rape is rape and that father (David?) raped Alesha's ass and painfully too. Maybe, as someone said before, Lit should add a new category for RAPE because this went beyond any fantasy sleep/dream non-consent/reluctance story I have ever read where the woman was unaware and couldn't properly consent.

Then there's the underlying idea that Alesha had to subjugate her own ego and personal life ambitions to play a submissive (in every sense) role in her own boyfriend's future. What a mind-fuck that is! She has to accept a second fiddle role in her own future marriage to stay with this guy.

Deciding she wants a baby with him (How is she going to be sure that only HE impregnates her?) and that it will be a son so she can experience the mother-son love she now craves is a whole other level of crazy. If this was supposed to convey some kind of deep emotional bonding then it does the opposite. This should have been a full-on nameless fuck-slut orgy for fans of that genre. Trying to sell it as any kind of "loving family" thing didn't come close even in a playful(?) slave-fantasy sense.

Some themes do not mix well at all. Mother-son loving nearly always get spoiled by adding in outside players. Family romps need a careful touch to avoid creepy issues or to stay away from becoming too crazy and muddled with random combinations. Personally, I think anal play needs to be handled like kryptonite instead of spread around like candy sprinkles on a birthday cake. You need to approach with care and caution and mutual consent after everything in the relationship is fully set up. First-day butt fucking in any story is usually going to spoil any realism.

From a usually skilled storyteller, this one was a real clusterfuck. Sorry.

as much as i LOVE these stories because that is ALL they r i have to agree u could have writen it better so that they did take no means no even in bdsm they have a safe word . if u rewrote it i i would gladly give it a five but the wa it is writen it is rape.even a perv like me has one decent bone (no pun intended) in my body.

I doubt a family would use such filthy language if they believed that sex is natural and wholesome. Then everyone loses their inhibitions? This story is over the top.

Another great story.

But kept going and going.

A lot of trouble could have been avoided with a motion detector on the back patio.

I would love to hear more from this family, such a beautiful beginning.

would have been better if dad didn't cum in her so they would know it was david's baby not dads.

I really don’t understand the negative responses. Everything was consensual. She had even pursued it and jumped in both feet. She was treated with love, and was carried through her inexperience into a state she had never imagined. She was very clearly given the option to say no and leave, but she chose to stay. —- a lot of repressed people in the comments bringing their baggage and destroying a beautiful dynamic.

Great story. Love every part if it. Keep up the good work.

Wonderful story, so loving and erotic....very well written and told.......():\

need more dude

a terrific tale, the forbidden is always desirable and you make it more so

LOVED ALL OF IT HOPING TO READ ABOUT HER MAKING FAMILY OBLIGATIONS WITH HER PARENTS AND MAYBE THE TWO FAMILYS JOINING TOGETHER A MARRIAGE A BABY AND FINALLY ALEISHA AND HER OWN SON MAKING LOVE

Excellent story which I enjoyed very much. The only turn off was Nikki's gigantic tits which added nothing to the story.

Truly a beautiful, well written, mutually consensual, incestuous love story.