All Comments on 'Every Last Thing'

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GREAT STORY. PLEASE CONTINUE WITH IT. HAVE YOU GIVEN ANY THOUGHT TO AFTER THEY HAVE THE MONEY IS IT IN THE CARDS FOR THEM TO BE IN LOVE AND START A NEW FAMILY?

Can't wait for the next installment.

Very nice, 5/5. FTDS

love that

What nest installment? They found out about the cheating, they have the money, and they become lovers. That's the story. Anymore would be padding. About the only things left are reactions from Dad and Barb, and that's a few paragraphs.

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Best read in a while

Great start. Bring on the continuation. You now own her. Take your rightful place by not just claiming her from dad but breeding your heirs with her. Take ownership of the womb that created you. That would also be the ultimate act of revenge against your dad & your ex. Eagerly waiting for the next chapters. 5☆

only thing is, it said your mom was 30, need to change tgat to maybe 38? If you are 18 she can't ve 30, but, a very erotic story.

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Not a bad start.

Building more, not just dropping us in, en media res, would yield more pain at discovery, and more emotional connection to Mom would build the strength of what occurs and becomes.

Basically, more, more, and more

Nice eroticism

Means you got my attention, thank you

Great story! Next installment she needs to concede ownership to her son. Then both her and her son must lower the hammer on her husband and fiance. 5 stars

Very good story with some areas to consider. There are several incorrect words and some mis-spelled as I recall. As another mentioned, you need to age her a bit. The 38 suggestion works nicely to make is more reasonable. Lastly, it seems that you wrote her body similar to Kim Kardasion with the out of proportion of huge breasts and butt. Yech!

Little more even-handed with mom's figure!

Would really like more chapters, and sic the feds on pop! Thanks for a pretty good story!

Love the story. Would like to see a follow up. AAAAAA++++++

Now for the revenge part. I look forward to the next chapter.

Hmm yes, I would love to see where this goes as well.

you some very good stories I hope you write part 2 to them

Very hot. I too look forward to the next step in their story. I agree that mom should be at least 38 or 39. I love the son’s tit and nipple play. Big tits should be played with; they should not be just an ornament.

Needs another chapter for you didn't say how the father reacted when he finds out what they did to his money and now the reaction of the son finance

Great start to this story now all you gotta do is finish it. There’s so many directions you can go with it. Looking forward to reading many more chapters to this story..⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️