by youbadboy
i think your story has alot of potential and sexxuaal energy. hell it made me cum.
It is a nice story. i think it needs another chapter like after she comes home from her date. other then that it was awesome.
You don't see many stories as short as this one actually come together this well. A well written single erotic scene that sets up it's own background within the flow of the narrative. Very well done.
Like I said, good Chinese food... hot and sweet. Fast but satisfying. Ultimately entertaining. Unforgettable. Gosh, are you blushing yet? Don't EVER make a sequel to this one, it's too perfect the way it is.
Very well written for such a short story. Anyone can create a decent story over several pages, but to do it so quickly, with such well written flow...well what can I say but excellent job. Don't take the easy way out now though and put a sequeal to it. Find another story line and blow us away again!
That was hott, you're a great writer keep it up sir...I like the ones like that.
You are so good! You have made this Lady cream many times tonight! Thanks much!
Wow... Let me just say ditto to all the other comments on thsi page. Except the one asking for another chapter. No more chapters! This is great the way it is.
Short stories are indeed that much harder to write well than longer pieces...kudos to you for doing such a sweet job of this one! And thanks. ;)
Wow !! hot story, every daddy needs a lil slut like that. Imagine Daddy and daughter ending up at a bar together. Everyone gets drunk and Daddys lil slut gets gang banged.
Almost word for word description of what me and my Dad did on my senior prom night and what we have done many times since,now I have a brother who will be 18 in a week I have a special Birthday present for him GeorgiaPeach
Fantastic!!!! A nice, hard, quick screw is sometimes the best. Great writing and description. I'd love to see how this all began. Keep writing my friend.
i have read this tons of time and it still make me so wet whenever i read it..
This story is sooo perfect. It cannot be improved upon, so please don't tinker with it at all
An observation of a technical nature first. Withing the first three sentences there is an issue about which date Chrissy is actually preparing for!!
Chrissy's father, though an alcholoic drunkard, seems to be acceptable in most other situations to her! Especially when Chrissy muses that he is nice after they have sex.
Quite obviously, Chrissy and her father's carnal, incestual consummation of the sex lives has been going for some time!! This particular scene occurs just as Chrissy is preparing to leave for a date and her father comes home from the bar pretty tipsy! His attitude about his language, and in particular invading Chrissy's privacy is an aberration and, in my opinion, abhorantly abusive!! Their sexual proclivities is a convenience, with no desire from either for their sex to be anything but basic, gutteral and self-satification!!
There is no deep-seeded lovebetween the two, beyond their bare minimal love as as parent and child. For her father's wish to have a slut, he's a bastard for wishing it on his daughter; his wanton slutty whore desires can be taken care of by his other quests outside the home!!!
as long as she is staying with dadddy she must 'pay rent' as it were. she seemed to enjoy it, or at least not hate it.
These two stories are the same besides a few minor details. Lazy writing.
I was scrolling looking for an older story when I saw your name and remembered this story. I could come to this story for a fast climax. I still can. I want a man like that. It doesn't have to be a "daddy" for me. I am embarrassed to say that I want a man like this who would make me horny just by his presence and get horny by the sight of me, however reluctant it is. I'd want him to grab my cunt and manipulate my clit to make me wet enough for his fast fuck.
Fuck, this is so mental and hot for me. I am so glad that it's still here for my pleasure. I'm glad that I asked for that sequel, too. Thanks for finishing me off.
Love the story was hoping you continued it to include her date and dad again once she got home. Did her date know she was already filled with cum and what would dad find once she got back home