by TryAnything
Too many stories are too short. Not much more than a simple slam bam thank you Mom.
This writer's style seems to capture the details without becoming totally boring and bogged down in stuff the reader cares nothing about.
I think Joan should return home and dominate her Mother.
It is the only story I've given that to that you wrote so far. I didn't like the forced sex in it, just not me. Over all however it was a well written story. I'd read another verison if the rude ass in this one got his ass kicked.
Great story... Just made my favorites list of authors. I love detail and deflowering any young girl (fantasy) always makes for a great story. I think all the readers need to read the stories here and open their minds.
This is not a how too it is an erotic fantasy and a very good one at that.
I am not into the forced sex thing either. It's just a major turn off for me. It would've been a much better story
without The Asshole Jack in it. I like most of your stories but not this one.
It would have been better if Joan was not forced but interduced. It's like she was raped and then she all of a sudden likes being raped.
I like the Liveaboard Fun and the Camping type stories. Leave this crap for someone else to write.
O Haven't seen your stuff in a good while. The Liveaboard Fun needs some more added, another edition. So, hurry up and heat up the keyboard!
liked this alot.had a couple of wanks as i was reading it.there's nothing like breaking in a virgin pussy knowing that noone has been there before you.
I have read your page, and saw you like reading negative feedback. The whole uncle jack part ruined the story. I started reading this, expecting either the main character to be either a sex freak, or for Steve to be one. If it wasn't forced sex with jack, I would have liked it better. I have read some of your stories... You can do better.
If you like making a stupid bully a hero you did a bang up job. I only wish you were one getting raped! What a sick person you must be!!!
I do not condone non-consensual sex, and the fact other family members went along meekly with sick uncle Jack is just, sick (and he even bragged about it! O_O)
Pity Joan that she has such spineless relatives, and that she was even portrayed as loving it after her deflowering. Hope Jack get his just desserts in time to come! Bullies always do.
This story is one only a listed sex offender would enjoy....this is a sick story from a sick mind
I agree with Richardao. Only a registered sex offender could enjoy this trash.
I read erotica to be entertained and excited. I DON'T ENJOY PEOPLE BEING HUMILIATED or forced to no sexual things against their will. But having said that your writing is strong,clear an compelling. THANKS FOR SHARING
I liked the writing. My version of the story would have been shorter. I have never understood a rapist that would stick their cock in someones mouth. In my version, the first time Jack forced her to suck his cock, she would have taken as much of his dick in her mouth as she could, and then bit his dick off.
I didn't dislike it but I'm not a fan of this type of story.
Added to that it would have been easier reading if you'd changed either Jane or Joan's name to stop confusion as even you muddled them up when Joan became Jane.
i think that was hot, me and my step daughter gave my son a suprise when he came home during the holidays this year . We seduced him and he found out we like to get high and kinky.
I don’t like rape stories, even if they enjoy it in the end, it’s still rape!