by howthegodschill
I thought you focused on what I know some women enjoy--having the male sub clean their dirty crack in the rear. Soon the man begins to see it as a privilege.
No build up, bad grammar, bad spelling, no description of character, the whole plot has potential but needs to be written like you care if anyone enjoys it. Sorry but I hope honest feedback is appreciated.
No build up, bad grammar, bad spelling, no description of character, the whole plot has potential but needs to be written like you care if anyone enjoys it. Sorry but I hope honest feedback is appreciated.
A lot of typos detracted from the story.
Overall, it was pretty nasty but the story can be developed.
It has good potential.