by demure101
He waited .... She dithered .... Slowly he went .... Poignant .....5-ed .
Getting what you want, especially long pined for love, can be the scariest thing ever...I weep for her missing her chance. I do not intend to miss mine, no matter how scared I am...
"Is there anybody there? said the Traveler, knocking on the moonlit door." Yours is a wonderful echo of that poem, though of course the situations of each speaker is vastly different. Cool!
There are also echoes - intentional or not - of the bitter sorrow of Dickens' Miss Havisham.
Having said that, your verse has a loveliness and poignancy of its own.
It reminds me of the few times in my life when, because of fear, I have failed to act.
BelleJ