All Comments on 'Roomers Ch. 01'

As a self afirmed "SlackAss" I can completly relate to your characters situatin of having to decide if the pay-off is worth all the Bullshit.......

A very interesting "treatment" as you said. I like it. Hope to read more about the slacker in the future.

MM

Well-written, interesting, I'll look for more of your work.

Thanks.

I think the premise of having to "work" for it, especially for a slacker, is an interesting touch. I like your writing style... kind of a shoot-from-the-hip honesty to the narration; no flowery BS. Thanks for sharing, look forward to more.

This tale holds promise...

Very goos story. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.

But,,, there is one question? A small error?

"...a used Ford Valiant"

I'm sure that was a Plymouth Valiant. A tough little car, I drove one ten miles once with a 4" hole in the block!

the story was really good and interesting. but it kind of annoyed me at how you kept writing "oh my word". try oh my gosh or something else.

Off to a great start! Can't wait to read more!

to much babbling at start, could have done with out the patty duke, a lot lot of stories do not use enough discription, you used way to much got bored in first chapter

... because it makes absolutely no sense at all. Really creative spelling though.

Plymouth Valiant (not Ford). I had one with about 200,000 miles on it, a 1974 model. Good story, though.

Seriously, it must be really easy to manipulate the score on your own stories, because this #!@^ is both poorly written and *boring*.

Seriously. Anybody with that power would not think twice about the sacrifice to use it. It would actually be to extra bonuses...