All Comments on 'Plain Old Dana'

Really enjoyed your fantasy!

Yep -- dem freckles will get you every time ~~ I even tried counting freckles one time many years a go and after a couple of hours or so I gave it up.!**

Good story "4" and really enjoyed !^

I especially liked how it lead to something more.The self discovery aspect could have been fleshed out more. Thanks for sharing.

Inventive and well-written!

Great read, hope there's a part two

I came twice reading this story (and that was before he actually penetrated her) and was too exhausted to keep going or I certainly would have come a third time when they fucked. Definitely one of the BEST stories I've read on here. Well done!

(Only one spelling error I noticed - it's taut with arousal, not taught with arousal.)

Powerful imagery, well developed and likeable characters, and a few deliciously turned phrases - a rare treat on this site and a worthy award winner! Cheers

Some of the dialogue was a little overdone, but that's part of the fun. An entertaining story, so I'm glad a friend recommended the read. What I loved about it (and I'm sure the reason he recommended it to me) was the fact that this woman decided to take on a dominant role in bed, and in doing so, brought out the submissive side of a man. The trembling as she edged him... The way he knelt quietly while she came down from her orgasm, just waiting for the next direction... The effect she had on him, pushing him into subspace and then bringing out the animal in him. These are some of my favorite parts of the femdom relationship my partner and I share in the bedroom. The author did a great job of showing this dynamic without exploiting it. It would be cool to see another chapter without the vampire pretense.

plain old Marine.

No such thing as an Ex-Marine. That's were you lost me.

Respect.

Great erotic short;- nice inventive twist on an old theme.

one of the best stories i have read on lit.

it was both funny as well as erotic !!

If Dana ever leaves Ben she should look me up!

Great idea - so easy to get swallowed by the story - one of the best I have read in a very long time !

Loved this! Thank you!

This has one of my links that I rarely see/read about....- dick biting. I don't know if fangs would add to the pleasure but reading about it was hot.

they seemed so normal and then..... nicely done

Really well drawn into the fantasy, very much enjoyed.

What a great story so well thought out and lots of males dreams, so much well described sex and loved the characters.

Will be looking for more from this author now.

Wow, that was a pretty risky scenario, but everything fell into place and you pulled it off nicely; well written.....

Definitely wasn't what I expected. Very imaginative and well written.

Absolutely wonderful!! Beautifully written and easy to visualize while reading. Super enjoyable and fun story, not to mention hot as hell! I love that Ben really wanted to take her out on a real date and get to know her - and so sweet to find out her was taken by her BEAUTY (and not CUTENESS) in his visit with Yaz. A real gentleman! Perhaps the beginning of what would ultimately be a lifetime of marital bliss together?

I love an erotic story that is playful. This one definitely is . Super kudos!!!

What you have written is one of the best stories on here, fantastic how the characters are so well constructed and what a plot line, fun but so real and as it’s on here full of great sex.

But that was , um, cute...5*