by Gaia_Lorraine
Had me wondering
Where you were going with this
Till resolution in last strophe;
An 'ah ha!' moment,
Now to reread it...
This poet continues to grow and impress. A wonderful transformation of the mundane into the magical. Hope to see more soon.
an aha moment at the end, not quite enuff ride in the middle to get there.
it is "eyre" not "eerie" if you use the right word, it is play enuff.
Why "oe’r"?
and probably needs a few commas.
That's enuff nits for now.
From MyNecroticSnail...
an aha moment at the end, not quite enuff ride in the middle to get there.
it is "eyre" not "eerie" if you use the right word, it is play enuff.
Why "oe’r"?
and probably needs a few commas.
That's enuff nits for now.
From the author...
Replace oe'r with over and insert a few commas then the beat disintegrates. The poem is pure rythm, feel it in your soul as it was written.
Enough nits for now implies more to come. Keep 'em coming O great master of poets.
Words are both a joy and a toy to me, read "Spine of a Penis" or "Fetus" and you will see. I will choose the words, the reader can choose the meaning.
A nice little poem that took me back to my holidays in Greece but with something not quite right that wasn't resolved until the end.
A delightful resolution and the poem has a nice meter and rhyming pattern.
Very enjoyable.